Hi Joshua, I like how you told us what he was doing but try and add some full stops and capital letters. I also think you should add the name of the diver and maybe add in some details like when was it. Also check your spelling like nelly it's nearly. Keep up the great work. Jasmine
Hi joshua I like the work you were explaining it looks awesome you just need to work on making sence.keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHi Joshua, I like how you told us what he was doing but try and add some full stops and capital letters. I also think you should add the name of the diver and maybe add in some details like when was it. Also check your spelling like nelly it's nearly.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great work.
Jasmine